50 Successful Ivy League Application Essays



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50 Essays to Ivy League Schools

Anonymous
Caltech
EVErYoNE KNowS ThAT IT TAKES BoTh 
hard work and a good 
understanding of the subject in order to complete a project. However, 
I never appreciated the other academic strengths and personal qualities 
needed until my 11th grade physics final. The task was to create an 
energy conversion machine that would undergo a minimum of five en-
ergy conversions. The construction of the machine piqued my interest 
in pursuing an engineering career and later became the pivotal factor in 
my decision to apply to Caltech.
I knew from the beginning that it would be a challenge to com-
plete just the minimum requirements for the project. Believing that my 
teammates and I had the ability and potential to do better, as the team 
leader, I made it our goal to cover the conversions of all eight energy 
types that were taught in class. I also strived to add into the machine 
a bonus feature of breaking an egg. Struggling to find a solution for 
breaking the egg, I reflected upon the force of gravity we had learned. 
This idea led to a trap-door mechanism that would allow the egg to fall 
under gravity and break upon impact.
In addition to excelling in math and the sciences, I am also a strong 
visual art student. Enjoying drawing and designing, I gained a differ-
ent perspective that I may not have had as just a science student. The 
creativity and imagination from the visual arts allowed me to use toilet 


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paper rolls, Styrofoam, and Popsicle sticks as the primary materials to 
construct the machine in a limited space within limited time. Together 
with good planning, coordination, and the ability to work in a team, my 
innovative perspective from visual arts made this project a success.
On the due date, I watched with a prideful glee as the machine 
operated smoothly. For going beyond the minimum requirements, the 
machine was very well received. Beyond earning an excellent grade, the 
challenge of completing this project intrigued my increasing interest in 
engineering. My expectations and goals as a future college student were 
also evolved during the process.
Certain that I wanted to become a professional in the engineering 
field, I began searching for a college that would provide me with an ex-
cellent academic and hands-on experience. While I knew that Caltech 
is a prestigious science and engineering school, it wasn’t until I received 
the Caltech Signature Award that I developed a stronger interest in be-
coming a Techer. Upon further research, I realized that Caltech is the 
college for me.
At Caltech, my engineering aspirations will be realized in this chal-
lenging, research-integrated environment. The rigorous coursework 
and the generous research opportunities at Caltech will provide the 
challenge I need to achieve my goal of becoming an engineer. In re-
turn, I believe the combination of my academic strength and creative 
personal characteristics will definitely contribute to Caltech and help to 
add to the interdisciplinary atmosphere of the school.
It takes more than just hard work to succeed as an engineering pro-
fessional. However, it can be achieved with the outstanding educational 
opportunity at Caltech and with my other academic strengths and per-
sonal qualities.
AnAlysis
When writing an essay about why a college is a fit for any given 
student, it’s tempting to just regurgitate the information found on the 
college’s website, discussed in its catalog or heard during a campus 
tour. A greater challenge is to address specific reasons that the col-
lege is a fit for you, and what many students omit—why you are a fit for 
the college. This student’s essay succeeds on both fronts.
She begins by explaining her academic and professional interest in 
engineering with a clear, concrete example. An example or anecdote 
is always welcome to readers because it is stronger to show than it is 


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to tell. In this case, the student’s actions strongly support her desire 
to become an engineer. This story demonstrates that the writer is the 
type of person who goes above and beyond, not just meeting the mini-
mum requirements, but far exceeding them. The admissions officers 
could tell that this student does not merely do her class assignments 
to get a grade, but that she actually enjoys the process of learning and 
then applying that knowledge to real life. Genuine academic pursuit is 
one of the key factors that admissions officers want to see in applica-
tions. They want to see that you are not just studying because you 
have to or because your parents tell you to, but that you actually enjoy 
exploring an academic field.
This student also showcases a unique talent that many other ap-
plicants to the university probably don’t possess—an artistic ability. 
Admissions officers are always seeking students who have an out-
of-the-ordinary trait or skill to enhance the entering class. They could 
easily envision how her artistic eye could help her develop creative 
solutions that other engineering students without her talent might not 
see.
This writer makes a connection between the project and her in-
terest in engineering, which eventually leads to her desire to attend 
Caltech. This evolution makes sense, and the admissions officers can 
easily see how her academic interest led to her professional interest 
in engineering and her ultimate interest in Caltech. She also manages 
to mention that she received the Caltech Signature Award—an award 
from the Caltech alumni association—for her science performance as 
a high school junior.
Overall, she addresses two critical questions: 1) what she will gain 
from Caltech and 2) what Caltech will gain from her attendance there. 
She does so in a way that also highlights her academic passion, visual 
arts talent, and even leadership. The essay is very specific about her 
inspiration and individual reasons for wanting to attend Caltech.



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