The graph shows the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents over a ten year period

kamran dehghan • 2 months ago

Seems like the only think that differs my writings from these IELTS expected writings is the not so rich exhibition of adjectives and adverbs.

Looks like there's a lot of work to do🤔🤔🤔🤔.

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kudo shinichi • 2 days ago

hiiii, this is the first time i do the Ielts Writing Tast 1. Please give me a comment, I intensely need your feedback to improve, pleaseeeee

Given is the bar chart providing information concerning how many residents and non- residents daily drove cars into the city centre from 1996 to 2005.

Overall, the car journeys of residents occupied big amount among the lately 1990s, and slipped dramatically in subsequent years.Meanwhile, ones among non-residents got peak in the early 2000s.

On term of residents, their highest number of car journeys was nearly 10000 on average in 1998, and declined sharply into about 3500 in 2004. In the next year, it boosted steadily into around 5000 per day.

It is evident from information provided that, in period of the lately 1900s, non-residents drove into the city centre scantily, a negligible 5000 in 1996. The amount was exponentially rose into over 8000 in 1999 and 2002, and had a considerable decrease to under 3000 in 2003 in a sudden. Afterward, it increase steadily, approximately 5000 in 2005.

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