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4) Body paragraph 2
Obesity came second for most countries except for the US, where the
number of obese people reached a peak of 7.1 million. On the other
hand, this amount noticeably declined to 5.8 million for Germany.
Similarly, the trends for England and Spain showed a moderate decrease
to 4.8 million for the former and 4.4 million for the latter.
(This paragraph shows a contrast between the third and the other two
categories described in the first body paragraph. Some comparative
structures, specific vocabulary, phrases, and details have successfully
described changes.)
Sample writing
The table indicates data related to the number of people diagnosed with three
types of ailments in the US, England, Germany, and Spain in 1990.
Overall, cardiovascular diseases affected the highest number of people in all

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countries, whereas diabetes was held accountable for the lowest number of
cases of poor health conditions.
Regarding the given statistics, cardiovascular diseases affected most of the
population in England, Germany, and Spain with 6.6, 6.3, and 5.9 million
people, respectively. However, this figure had a noticeable reduction to 4.6
million Americans. In contrast, diabetes affected the lowest number of
individuals in all these countries. The figure had a significant drop to 2.2
million for the US. In comparison, it was raised minimally for Spain,
reaching the second-lowest number of diabetic patients with 2.3 million.
Obesity came second for most countries except for the US, where the number
of obese people reached a peak of 7.1 million. On the other hand, this amount
noticeably declined to 5.8 million for Germany. Similarly, the trends for
England and Spain showed a moderate decrease to 4.8 million for the former
and 4.4 million for the latter.
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