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3) Body paragraph 1
There should be a focus on details, comparison, contrast, and specific
vocabulary and phrases to describe trends in both body paragraphs. Starting
the first body paragraph with a sentence initiator, such as “based on the given
data”/“according to the information”/“regarding the data”/“based on the
statistics,” etc., is recommended.
Based on the statistics, traveling by car stood at roughly 25% in 1990,
whereas almost 65% of Vancouver’s population considered commuting
by bus. Over the next ten years, these numbers had drastic changes and
ultimately met in the year 2000, when the trend for taking the bus went
down gradually to approximately 45%. In contrast, the figure for
traveling by car witnessed a significant growth to the same amount as
the other trend simultaneously.
(Detailed percentages and periods describe trends in comparative structures
precisely; there is practical usage of the vocabulary of approximation, noun,
and verb phrases.)