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Wednesday, February 28, 2018 
IELTS Writing Task 2: another band 9 paragraph 
Is it always a good thing to work hard?
Here's my plan for a 5-sentence paragraph to answer this question: 
1. Topic sentence - hard work is 
usually
seen as positive 
2. Explain why - education: pass exams, good grades, career progression 
3. Explain why - employment: most industrious people rise to the top 
4. However - it can become an obsession with perfection, competition 
5. Result - neglecting family relationships, stressed, irritable 
And here's my paragraph: 

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When a person is described as hard-working, this is almost always seen as a positive trait or attitude. 
In the realm of education, we expect hard workers to diligently follow instructions, pass their exams, 
achieve good grades and take their first steps on the path to a successful career. Similarly, in an 
employment setting, we expect the most motivated, industrious and committed individuals to rise to 
the top and become leaders or experts in their fields. However, I believe that in some people the 
desire to work hard can become an unhealthy obsession with perfection, outcompeting others or 
being the best. When people work so hard that they neglect family and relationships or become 
stressed and irritable, a positive trait has surely become detrimental. 
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Wednesday, March 07, 2018 
IELTS Writing Task 2: do you have a 'mental picture'? 
If you want to become a good essay writer, you could start by thinking about the following question: 
Before you write an essay, do you have a 
clear mental picture
 of what you're aiming to produce?
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