Практикум по синхронному переводу с русского языка на английский

идеи выработки других международно-правовых инструментов —
"producing" is often better then the much used "drawing up" for "выра­
ботки." If something complicated or sensitive is involved, "crafting" is a
good stylistic choice.

10. 
    мы призываем предпринять энергичные усилия... active or intensive
    work sound much better than "energetic," which suggests a somewhat
    frantic image of delegates literally racing in to work or jumping up and
    down from excitement.
    

10. 
    завершить... разработку практически согласованной Конвенции —
    практически — can be dropped. The idea is that of getting the job done.
    

10. 
    активно поработать над теми... предложениями — there is a problem
    here with the use of the cognate of активно — actively; "intensive" is a
    much better choice than active.
    

19. 
    ...предложениями делегаций, высказанными... — the idea here is
    that the proposals were made (shortest and simplest choice) or put
    forward. "Proposed" would get the meaning across, but the "proposals
    proposed" is awkward. "Put forward" is also a good solution, but "voiced"
    or "expressed" are awkward, particularly since the sentence speaks of
    written as well as oral proposals.
    

19. 
    не имеет целью затрагивать... — the literal translation "touch on"
    does not work. The idea here is one of interference with the competence
    of other documents/norms, and so "impinge" would be a good choice.
    More neutral is simply "deal with."
    

21) подготовленный рабочей группой проект Конвенции — the
interpreter who has started in too early and said "prepared by the working
group" need only add a pause (a mental comma), and the definite article: