Cayman Islands Writing Exemplar

AF7: 

Word Choice

 – Select appropriate and effective vocabulary

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The author uses a wide range of vocabulary (e.g., “tremendously,” “thrilled,” “interactive,” “format,” “arise”).

•  The author uses some words that relate to the persuasive objective and make the author sound confident and 

 

convincing (e.g., “guarantee” and “should”).

AF8: 

Conventions

 – Use correct spelling

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Most words in the piece are spelled correctly.

What’s Next? Identifying Targets for this Student:

 

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AF 4 – The author could improve his/her use of linking words and phrases. He/she currently uses simple  

linking words (e.g., “Secondly” and “Finally”) which need to develop into longer linking phrases (e.g., “In  

addition to students learning in an easier way, students will want to come to school”).

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AF 2 – The author should also consider incorporating a wider range of persuasive devices, including facts,  

examples, statistics, and counter-arguments.  

 

Comments:

The author possesses a wide ranging vocabulary which is reflected in his/her word choices and overall voice 

 

throughout the piece. The author effectively writes for a specific audience and clearly and precisely communicates 

 

his/her ideas. There is some evidence of a strong knowledge of punctuation, in that he/she is marking advanced 

clauses; however, the author could focus on using semi-colons which would prevent some run-on sentences. In  

addition, the incorporation of additional persuasive devices, such as facts (e.g., “Research shows that 75% of  

students report that they are bored in a teacher directed lesson”). A more structured closing using more advanced 

linking words and summarising the main ideas would also help this student move to Level 5.

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Student Samples

Level 5