Cayman Islands Writing Exemplar

What’s Next? Identifying Targets for this Student:

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AF 5 – The author should focus on using connectives. He/she should consider including “and” to write longer  

compound sentences and elaborate on the reasons given.  

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AF 1 – The author needs to develop more relevant reasons that will more likely appeal to the emotions and 

values of the audience. The author should include at least three relevant and supported reasons.   

Comments:

The author demonstrates an understanding of grouping ideas into paragraphs for the sake of persuasion. In order 

to reach Level 3, the author needs to expand each reason by including more developed and relevant evidence.  

For example, the author states, “First, we need more playtime so we can get exercise.” The author should have 

included supporting evidence with a statement similar to “Exercise is important so that we stay healthy and fit.” 

Lastly, to move the piece to a Level 3, it would be beneficial if the author presented a call to action during the 

closing.

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Student Samples

Level 3