Ielts sample essays collection

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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
(TA) Task Achievement
Candidate addresses the requirements of the task and presents an overview with 
information appropriately selected. There may be inconsistencies in tone. Candidate 
presents and adequately highlights key features/bullet points but details may be 
slightly irrelevant, inappropriate or inaccurate. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas. There is clear progression throughout.
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under 
use. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision. The 
candidate uses some less common lexical items with some awareness of style and 
collocation. There may be some occasional errors in word choice or spelling.
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a variety of complex structures. Produces frequent error-free sentences. 
Candidate has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors. 
Example 4
The first pie chart illustrates the amount (in percentage) that the world spends on five 
categories of resources. The second chart provides information of the population 
distribution (in percentage) across five continents, while the final chart distinguishes 
the percentage of resources that are consumed by 
the 
USA & Europe in comparison 
to other countries. 
Other purchases contributed to the most substantial amount of world spending 
(40%). Slightly more than half (24%) was spent on food. This was followed by 

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