Ielts sample essays collection

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(TA) Task Achievement
Candidate addresses the requirements of the task and presents an overview with 
information appropriately selected. There may be inconsistencies in tone. Candidate 
presents and adequately highlights key features/bullet points but details may be 
slightly irrelevant, inappropriate or inaccurate. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas. There is clear progression throughout.
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under 
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(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task. Attempts to use less common 
vocabulary but with some inaccuracy. Makes some errors in spelling and or word 
formation, but they do not impede communication. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms. Makes some errors in grammar 
and punctuation but they rarely reduce communication.
Example 3
The pie charts illustrate the information regarding the expenditure and usage of 
various resources by different countries of the world and also the distribution of 
population. 
Overall, people spent the most on resources 
rather 
than food, clothing, housing and 
transport whereas the least was on clothes. The population is highest in the 
continent of Asia followed by Europe and America at the same level while the it's 
low
est
in Africa and other continents.
With respect to the spending and consumption of resources, the most was in the 
others category which was 40%, in 
contrast 
to the clothes section which was only 
6%. The second highest expenditure was on food which was 18% higher than that of 
clothes. This was followed by the category of transport and housing which 
experienced an expense of 18
%
and 12 % respectively.
With regards to the distribution of 
the 
population, 57% of the people belonged to 
Asia which is the highest in the world, while America and Europe both possess 14%. 
In contrast, Africa has only 10% of the population and the other continents 
are 
5% 
lower than that.