Ielts sample essays collection

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began to come here for 50 years 
six times more. 
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five times for
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years. period.
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was changing
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far less visitors from Asia. Both these countries have seen a large increase by
2010 . 
The number of tourists from USA 
remains stable over the
50 year
period.
The number of British tourists does not change much too in Australia, but in Germany 
it decreases
by 5%.
(154 words)
Score: 5.0 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Generally attempts to address the task. Recounts detail mechanically and there is 
no clear overview or conclusions which prevents a 6 for TA 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Presents the information with some organisation but there is a lack of overall 
progression to the response. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Limited range of vocabulary which is minimally adequate for the task. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Frequent mistakes in grammar and a limited range of structures can cause some 
strain for the reader. 
Example 2
The pie charts show information about 
the 
origin of tourists who travelled to 
Australia and 
Germany
in 1960 and 2010. Overall
,
it is seen that during the time 
many more traveller
s
from Asia visited both 
Germany
and 
Australia
. 
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these countries least had Asian 
tourists, in