Ielts sample essays collection

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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
will help his friends with homework and exam preparations, rather than being selfish 
to attain the highest grade himself/herself and denying to help others. Moreover, 
being co-operative helps one to become a better individual, by sharing everyone’s 
joys and sorrows and helping people to rise
up
when they face hurdles. 
In conclusion, although a competitive spirit gives one a sense of purpose and 
achievement, a co-operative student and adult gives back more to society by helping 
and becoming caring individuals, and I believe that the foundation of the human 
society 
lies 
on 
co-operation.
(274 words)
Score: 7.5 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Sufficiently addresses all parts of the task. The response is well developed with 
supported evidence and examples. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
There is very clear progression throughout. Uses a wide range of cohesive devices 
appropriately although there may be occasional misuse. Presents a clear central 
topic to each paragraph. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision. Uses 
less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation. May 
produce some errors in word choice, spelling and word formation. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a variety of complex structures. Produces frequent error-free sentences. Has 

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