Ielts sample essays collection

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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
(253 words) 
Score: 6.0 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Addresses all parts of the task although some could be more fully covered. The 
position is relevant although slightly repetitive and sometimes unclear. Some areas 
may be undeveloped enough. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Information is arranged clearly and there is clear overall progression. Paragraphs are 
relatively easy to understand and generally have a clear central topic although they 
may not be logical sometimes.
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task. Attempts to use some less 
common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy with spelling and word choice. 
Spelling mistakes do not cause a problem with understanding.
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a mix of simple and complex structures but with more errors on the complex 
structures. The mistakes in grammar don’t usually cause a problem with 
understanding. 
Example 2 
There have been tons of innovations and changes in education which make it better 
and better after many generations have gone by. The two opinions are also included 
in the process of upgrading teaching methods: should children be encouraged to be 
Comment [A22]: 
Don’t use “tons/ tonnes”. 
It’s too informal. 
Use “many” or “a huge amount of” 
instead.

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