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Score: 7.0
Detail comments
(TA) Task Achievement
Addresses all parts of the task.
Presents a clear position throughout the response and presents,
extends and
supports main ideas.
There may be a tendency to overgeneralise and supporting ideas may lack focus.
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision.
Uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation.
May produce some errors in word choice, spelling and word formation.
(LR) Lexical Resource
Uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision.
Uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation.
May produce some errors in word choice, spelling and word formation.
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Uses a variety of complex structures
Produces frequent error-free sentences.
Has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors.
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Example 3
There has been increasing debate globally regarding environmental protection. Some
people assert that only government officials and major
companies can influence
environmental related decisions, since individual persons are powerless to make such
decisions. I agree with this viewpoint to a moderate extent.
Government bodies ha
ve
the power to create and implement policies that can have
widespread influence on a community’s outcomes. For instance, the government in
Japan has imposed strict regulations to prevent
overfishing
to ensure preservation of
the marine environment. As a result, all Japanese fishermen are obligated to keep to
these rules. Similarly, big companies are also at the optimal
position to influence
consumer choices as mass manufacturers of products. As an example, if they chose
to produce products that are environmentally friendly, such as using biodegradable
materials instead of plastic packaging, they can help to reduce waste at a mass level.
These examples illustrate the sphere of influence that government officials and large
companies have to improve our environment.
On the other hand, I feel that every individual is also is capable of making conscious
choice and taking steps to protect our environment. For example, if one chooses to
use recyclable bags instead of disposable plastic bags,
he or she can help to save
over 100 plastic bags each year. People socialize often,
and can influence
others
actions through modelling positive and environmentally conscious behaviours. Even
though these actions may seem insignificant in the short term, the collective efforts
can have a huge influence in time to come.
In conclusion, I agree that the government and big companies exert strong influences
on our environment wellness through executing policies, as well as through
the
manufacturing of environmentally friendly consumer products. However, I also
believe that individuals have the capacity to exert personal
choices and potentially
influence their friends to protect the environment in the long-term trajectory.
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