Ielts essay samples band 9

32 IELTS ESSAY
 
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Band 
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The conclusion here is simple. The children today are being put into a ‘survival-of-the-
fittest’ situation much earlier than they must be when they should really be trying to do 
their best. Such untimely loss of innocence is only going to make civilization more 
antagonistic. Therefore we must ensure that personal development may be ushered in 
harmony and not in vile rivalry. 
2. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. 
Present a written argument to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the 
following topic: 
"Mothers play key roles in the upbringing of children. But in the recent times both 
parents are getting busy with professional life. Who in your opinion should take the 
responsibility of child care now?" Give your opinion in no less than 250 words. 
Model Answer: 
There’s no denying how important a role the mother plays in the upbringing of her 
children. But torn by modern economics, mothers are leaving home for professional 
practice, raising the question “who now takes care of the children?” In my belief, though, 
all efforts to replace the proverbial mother are destined to be futile. 
Observing Nature, scientifically or other wise, tells us that being a mother, if it were a 
social role, is ideally possible by the child bearing female and others may only be nurses 
or patrons. The physiological and psychological exclusiveness of the mother means all 
the other social entities and all the greatness of science and civilization can only 
supplement, and never replace, her part in the upbringing of children. Any one else 
trying to don her role is simply unnatural. 
But of course there is opinion in the contrary also. Modern science flaunts its age old 
practice of replicating nature and natural processes. Now more than ever humans and 
their society are evolving frequently against the tide of Nature, and civilization sustains 
this evolution. Such evolution has also effected the socio-economic distinction of men 
and women. Now in the industry women are producing as much as men do. So “women 
are better off in the house” is no longer true. 
While such human evolution is true and should morally be supported, going against 
Mother Nature, when we’re clearly not in a position to, is immoral. Science has not yet 
found a biological and psycho-social alternative for the natural mother. And while 
gender equality is great, it never means fusion of the two poles of our species. I don’t 
believe science never has strived to eliminate sex because it is simply impracticable. So 
men and women, so uniformly productive as they recently are, don’t have to utilize their 
worth in the same end of civilization.
If one person, or sex, is naturally gifted to play a special and vital role in the society, it 
is her duty to thrive in it. I therefore conclude that in a child’s life its mother is 
irreplaceable, and, hence, it is she who should rear her child. 

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3.You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. 
Present a written argument to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the 
following topic: