Cayman Islands Writing Exemplar

AF7: 

Word Choice

 – Select appropriate and effective vocabulary

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There is some evidence that the author uses words that are related to the persuasive objective (e.g., “need,” 

“please”), but more forceful words could be used (e.g., “believe,” “demand,” etc.).

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Evidence of a wider vocabulary (e.g., “talented,” “gifted,” “improve,” “increase,” “lifestyle,” “healthiest”) could 

also be included.

AF8: 

Conventions

 – Use correct spelling

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The author spells the majority of words correctly.  

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The author demonstrates phonemic awareness when constructing unknown words and makes appropriate  

attempts at adventurous words (e.g., “exersize” – exercise). 

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What’s Next? Identifying Targets for this Student: 

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AF 4 – The author needs to focus on using multiple, well-structured paragraphs. 

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AF 7 – The author needs to work on making stronger word choices and incorporating a wider vocabulary so 

that the piece has greater effect.

Comments:

The author understands the persuasive objective and has presented three reasons with supporting evidence  

that are all related to the main topic. The author was given Level 4c because he/she has met and exceeded the  

criteria for Level 3a by writing a strong and structured opening and closing, giving three developed reasons  

with related evidence, using a range of persuasive devices including rhetorical questions and facts, and by  

communicating his/her ideas clearly and precisely. The author does need to include individual paragraphs for 

each new idea and incorporate stronger word choices which will help develop his/her writing voice.  

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