Case study 1 : Read the following example and find the errors

Case study 1 :

Read the following example and find the errors.
Techonkreet Techno

Date – 23rd December, 2012

Sg RamalLuar

43000 Kajang

Selangor, Malaysia
Thank you for your time.
I hope, I will be considered for your company’s employment. I have enclosed a copy of my C.V. and experience certificates for your review.I am Ms. IrineAbang, 36 years old, graduate from Selangor University batch of year 2000. I have worked for High Climb and Make Stock under the position of adviser. I am willing to attend for interview, test and relocate as per your convenience.
Dear Sir / Madam,

. I am interested in applying for the aforesaid.This is in response to your advertisement ‘Required Graduates in any discipline’ for office work’ published in the Daily on 29th December 2012

Sub: Application Letter for job with reference to Advertisement in Daily, 29th Dec, 2012
Your assistance and attention to this application is highly appreciated.

Respectfully Yours,

Looking forward to hear from you.
IrineAbang

Lot 318, Jahlan Muhibbah

93400, Kuching

Sarawak, Malaysia

Phone - 802 – 418705
Answer

Correct version of application letter

Techonkreet Techno

Sg RamalLuar

43000 Kajang

Selangor, Malaysia
Date – 23rd December, 2012
Sub: Application Letter for job with reference to Advertisement in Daily, 29th Dec, 2012
Dear Sir / Madam,

This is in response to your advertisement ‘Required Graduates in any discipline’ for office work’ published in the Daily on 29th December 2012. I am interested in applying for the aforesaid.

I am Ms. IrineAbang, 36 years old, graduate from Selangor University batch of year 2000. I have worked for High Climb and Make Stock under the position of adviser. I am willing to attend for interview, test and relocate as per your convenience. I hope, I will be considered for your company’s employment. I have enclosed a copy of my C.V. and experience certificates for your review.
Your assistance and attention to this application is highly appreciated.
Thank you for your time.
Looking forward to hear from you.
Respectfully Yours,
IrineAbang

Lot 318, Jahlan Muhibbah

93400, Kuching

Sarawak, Malaysia

Phone - 802 – 418705
Case study 2
Re-write the following letter of application in the correct order
a I am presently employed by a small computer company, but I feel that I am not using my knowledge of software engineering to the full. I am looking for a more challenging position where my field of specialisation could be exploited in a more stimulating environment. As you will notice on my enclosed CV, the job you are offering suits both my personal and professional interests.


b I would be pleased to discuss my curriculum vitae with you in more detail. Please do not hesitate to contact me if you require further information. I look forward to hearing from you.


c Dear Ms Johansson


d 12 January 2004


e I am writing to apply for the position of Director of Software Development which was advertised on your company website.


f 31 Bloomington Street
London
SK45 BX123


g Carry Johansson
12 Hamilton Street
Brighton
FH2 6KX


h Peter Sellers


i Yours sincerely

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