Jan 18, 2015
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my comment on What are the advantages and disadvantages of the internet
by: Anonymous
Hi,
It is a good start, but you will lose a huge point in task achievement point because you did not write about the disadvantages of the internet.
Also, I think you need to add more a complex sentences and compound sentence. This website includes an excellent explanation of that. You will find it at lessons section, then click on grammar section.
Lastly, I think you should include more transitions word such as moreover, whereas, so - you can learn the strategy from this site.
You said that you agree that there are people have used the internet in useful aspects and others have used them in useless things. I guess this is totally different from the question which are if the internet change the world and how we can people live without it.
thanks
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