Практикум по синхронному переводу с русского языка на английский

Комментарии:

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   по предотвращению — "avert" is an often forgotten and very good
   synonym for the overused "prevent."
   

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   тысяч мирных граждан — "peaceful citizens" sounds odd. As opposed
   to what — violent citizens? "These" — since they have just been
   mentioned — civilians is fine.
   

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   Starting with "немалое число" can lead to an awkward sentence, unless
   the interpreter begins with "Quite a few of them are children, women, etc."
   Without a text that would be a reasonable solution.
   

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   жертвами... становится и персонал — this и needs translation — also,
   or as well as.
   

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   мирным гражданским населением — again, "the civilian population"
   is quite sufficient; no need to add peaceful. If you must use "peaceful,"
   then "peaceful citizens" is better than "peaceful civilians."
   

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   телами погибших — corpses is a lot shorter than "bodies of the dead."
   

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   важно добиться того — can be safely shortened to "It is important
   that."
   

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   по защите гражданского населения, использует насилие — the word
   "and" needs to be inserted between these clauses. The interpreter who has
   forgotten to do so, or not realized that this is the last clause in the
   sentence (until it is too late!) can then add after "against the civilian
   population and humanitarian personnel in addition/also/as well."
   

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