Ielts-7-Writing

ALTERNATIVE INTRODUCTIONS
There are many things that can be regarded as the most significant invention
before the computer. In this essay, I will look at the telephone in terms of it
being a time-saving device and a catalyst in the development of modern
telecommunications. (42 words)
There have been many significant inventions before the computer. In this
essay, I will look at the telephone in terms of it being a time-saving device
and a catalyst in the development of modern telecommunications. (35 words)

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6.28 GARDENS AND ROADS
There are more and more vehicles in front of our houses, which is very
dangerous for cyclists and pedestrians. Besides, many gardens have to
make way for highways or expressways. How can we make everyone
satisfied?
INTRODUCTION
Murphy’s law says, “If you try to satisfy everyone, somebody will be
dissatisfied.” In this essay, the above issue will be dealt with in terms of
people’s needs, developmental requirements, and the planning of cities. (35
words)
BODY
First, environmental psychologists have proved that people living in cities
need to experience nature in some way or another. For example, it was found
that children who are born and grow up in “concrete jungles” and do not
have the opportunity to play on lawns, climb trees, or see and smell flowers
and plants once in a while develop higher levels of aggression than those
kids who do have such opportunities.
Second, cities are places where commerce and industry are concentrated.
This results in the need for many vehicles to move around and to do so
quickly. For this, a network of roads, highways, freeways, and bypasses
needs to be built. These take up a lot of space in our cities.
Lastly, it is always difficult to change situations in existing cities. When
planning new cities, however, we are able to ensure that the needs of the
people as well as commerce and industry are met. When they are educated at
universities, city planners should be made aware of everyone’s needs and
trained to solve problems. (176 words)
CONCLUSION

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So I have briefly looked at the needs of people and business and what has to
be done in the future. To conclude, it could be said that we have to learn from
the mistakes of the past to build better cities in the future. (45 words) (Total
words: 256)