Overall, as can be seen from the map the school was not alternated significantly. But there is a partial alternation this period

The presented map highlights information on how territory of school changes ( will change) over the course of 10 years.
Overall, as can be seen from the map the school was not alternated significantly.But there is a partial alternation this period.
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In the year 2004, position of school's much greener all the years, however small trees were planted instead of huge trees in the northeast corner. In addition, the numerous trees also sowed ( what is this?) in the midway of the landmarks school and they are ( why present simple) so dense.
The school did not saw( kalla qo’yur shunaqa) a number of considerable changes in the opposite side. But one of the most noticeable is that third school building block was eracted instead of sport field and it was moved to another location not far from the previous one. Furthermore second car park was built between midst of new school building and dense trees. Another big alternation is that road was opened because of road shortening. This road does not take along time to go third school building block campared to main road.

Feedback: You really need to analyse sample essay, you have got problems with describing a map. You have got loads of simple grammar errors. Some points are not described clearly
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Many people hold the notion that Superstar's are more well-known for their fascination and wealth than for their accomplishments and it is awful for humans. I completely agree with this concept and i will say ( you are writing not saying) about why I contradict this statement.
There are hordes of individuals who reach their goal. Wealth and fame do not come facile to people. If they strive to labour for their life, (do not translate word by word) they will absolutely success all of the field's, it is not interesting it is ordinary whether difficult field's. Therefore young people must study from young age, as it were ???, from kindergarten's. There are not adequate, however The subject and life challenges are thought by teacher's and family members or old people who indicate right way. Every humans know, money does not come easily and all of the achievements come because of knowledge and attempt. ( there is not a clear argument )
Every know?? nowadays internet and social networking is popular in the globe. People are able to observe and read dates via this these items. Internet and Social networks influence Humans personality's, culture, brain and their health. As an illustration of this countless people utilize instagram and they see popular people or such kind of events. If People want or not, numerous Videos and pictures encounter on the internet. This video's, pictures influence many young people, as it were ( why are you using this phrase) , People also imitate to celebrities. But after that they go astray their right way and it occurs dreadful situation.
In conclusion, i reckon that humans must utilize internet and social networks on the right ways, if they want not to corrupt their life or career. ( not clear)

Feedback : You did not give an argument properly. Do not use : as it were. Recheck it yourself after writing. You have many grammar mistakes