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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
awareness among people about the negative impact of trees cutting and planting 
more trees on the lands. Also, cleaner resources could be used which are more 
environmentally friendly like wind and solar power. 
To conclude, although the demand of the population to larger spaces and the timbers 
of trees, new strategies need to be taken to sort out the global warming issue
.
For 
example, 
establishing more green areas and exploiting other natural alternative 
resources to produce the power in the factories would reduce the rising levels of 
global 
temperature significantly. 
(334 words) 
Score: 6.5 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Addresses all parts of the task although some parts may be more fully covered than 
others. 
Presents a relevant position although the conclusions may become unclear or 
repetitive.
Presents relevant main ideas but some may be inadequately developed/unclear. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas; there is a clear progression throughout. 
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-
/over-use. Presents a clear central topic within each paragraph.