Ielts sample essays collection

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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
http://ieltsonlinetests.com
 
In conclusion, the use of computers and their programs during class may result in 
many advantages. These include making children familiar with developing new skills. 
Although they introduce many benefits, it is also important for the teachers to not 
rely on them too muc
h 
for when unexpected circumstances arise. Therefore 
firmly
believe computers should be introduced in classrooms, as long as teachers do not 
depend on them 
entirely 
to handle the children. 
(313 words) 
Score: 7.5 
Detail comments 
(TA) Task Achievement
Sufficiently addresses all parts of the task. The response is well developed with 
supported evidence and examples. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas. There is clear progression throughout.
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be very 
occasional under use. Presents a clear central topic to each paragraph. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision. Uses 
less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation. May 
produce some errors in word choice, spelling and word formation. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a variety of complex structures. Produces frequent error-free sentences. Has 
good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors. 
 
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