Ielts sample essays collection

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(TA) Task Achievement
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IELTS SAMPLE ESSAYS COLLECTION 
VOLUME 1 – Academic Training 
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arguments is put forward on both sides. However, there is too much detail on the 
one argument against history - try to have two ideas on each side. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
The answer is well-organised and it is easy to follow. A wide range of linking 
phrases is used accurately and appropriately. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
A wide range of vocabulary is used which is precise to the task. There are a number 
of spelling mistakes but they do not impede communication.
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
The majority of sentences are complex and there is a wide range of structures. There 
are a number of errors with agreement and articles. 
 
Example 2 
Ways of understanding human life are becoming increasingly controversial among 
certain demographics of society. There are some people who consider that we will 
not be able to gain any knowledge from the past for our life in the present day, 
whereas there are others who consider history as a valuable source to analyze a 
human’s life. In my opinion, a look into the past will give us 
an 
immense 
amount of 
information to help us understand life for even the present times
,
despite some 
people's belief that it can be irrelevant now. 
There are many who are of the opinion that learning from the past will not be useful 
for our present day which 
is 
maybe be due to various reasons. One reason could be 
because of their belief that information related to olden times 
was 
applicable only for 
those times while the present has undergone a lot of changes in various aspects of 
life. For example, learning about different wars and about who fought whom in the 
past may not help us today where there are no such major wars and 
the 
majority of