Ielts sample essays collection

 
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(TA) Task Achievement
Addresses the requirements of the task.
Presents an overview with information appropriately selected. 
Presents and adequately highlights key features/bullet points but details may be 
irrelevant, inappropriate or inaccurate. 
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Arranges information and ideas coherently and there is a clear overall progression. 
Uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences 
may be faulty or mechanical. 
May not always use referencing clearly or appropriately. 
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task. 
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american
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japanese
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Attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy. 
Makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation, but they do not impede 
communication. 
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms. 
Makes some errors in grammar and punctuation but they rarely reduce 
communication. 
Example 2 
The presented line graph illustrates the percentage of people older than 65 in the 
three countries USA, Sweden and Japan between 1940 and 2040. The overall trend 
in all three countries is an estimated significant increase in older inhabitants until 
2040.
The USA started out with the highest amount of older population in 1940 
at
approximately nine percent, whereas Japan just 
had
five percent and Swedens’ 
number laid in the middle of both of them with about seven percent. Sweden had a 
constant increase in numbers until it reached 20 % in about 2010, however, there is 
an estimated drop in numbers shown in-between then and 2030 before it 
supposedly will gain its peak with 25 % in 2040. The USA showed a climb to 15% in 
1980, but the numbers settled on a plateau after a slight fall until 2020. The number 
is supposed to rise up again to 23 % in 2040.
Different to both other countries, 
Japan's
number of older people stayed very low- 
beneath 5 %- until after 2000 before it started to rise tremendously and is assumed 
to be the one country with the highest amount of seniors in 2040 with 27%.