Model Answer
Today, people in many countries have to spend more and more time
away from their families.
Why is this happening?
What effects does this have on the people themselves and on their
families?
In today’s world, many individuals find that they have less time with the
family. Before, such occurrences were limited to just a few places, but now,
citizens in many countries experience something similar. Although the
situation may be viewed as a necessary sacrifice for some, there are
consequences.
One reason why this is happening is that the increased standard of living is
requiring breadwinners to seek better opportunities farther from home.
Domestically, this may mean working in a nearby town or city on the
weekdays and going home on the weekends. But other times, the search for
greener pastures often requires them to work abroad for months or years.
Another reason for this shift is society’s promotion of independence.
Nowadays, a person is considered mature and successful if they can live
independently. Thus, many teens leave home early, preferring to study in
faraway cities. Such independence may also encourage spouses to maintain
separate career paths that keep them away from one another for extended
periods.
Unfortunately, such a long time apart takes its toll on individuals and their
families. Homesickness is often a result of time away from the family,
leading to depression. If such persons cannot recover quickly, their jobs or
studies are often greatly affected, leading to even more problems - a vicious
cycle. As for their families, the lengthy separation usually weakens the
family bonds, despite the availability of communication technology.
Children often do not feel their absentee parent’s love, causing resentment in
some cases. The relationship between spouses is particularly strained, which
is why marital affairs and divorce often occur.
To conclude, because of the general need to provide for the family and
achieve personal success, this trend of living apart is slowly becoming the
norm. However, if strong family bonds are to be maintained, families should
consider other ways to earn or ensure that meaningful communication
between members is somehow sustained.
(316 Words)
Comments
The essay would achieve a high score for IELTS.
It fully addresses both parts of the question:
1. The reasons for it
2. How it affects the individual and the family
Relevant ideas are presented and explained.
It's very well-organised with introduction, body paragraphs and conclusion.
Ideas are all linked in well together.
It has excellent vocabulary and grammar in terms of range and accuracy.
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