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tional anytime in the near future.

When grouped, the sentences of the supporting paragraph logically unite in a very 

persuasive way:

Firstly, a teacher powered by artificial intelligence would have difficulty interpret-

ing the educational needs of a classroom of students. For example, Honda Asimov, 

one of the world’s most advanced robots, has trouble distinguishing simple human 

emotions. If today’s most advanced artificial intelligence cannot categorise these 

basic physical cues, it is difficult to believe that a robot could be capable of altering 

study plans and teaching styles in a dynamic classroom setting. Thus, this makes it 

clear that a technology-driven teacher is not going to be operational anytime in the 

near future.

A quick dissection illustrates the persuasive nature and manner in which the para-

graph connects to other parts of the essay. Firstly, the topic amplifies and expands 

upon what was declared in the introduction paragraph’s outline sentence, a clear 

instance of cohesion at the essay level. Secondly, the argument is strengthened 

through the use and discussion of a tangible example, and this makes it difficult for 

the reader to refute the writer’s point. The discussion and conclusion sentences 

expand upon and clarify the relevance of the supporting point and link it back to the 

central theme of the essay.

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