Ielts-7-Writing

ALTERNATIVE VIEW
Tobacco is a drug, and it has been proven that it is dangerous to people’s
health. For example, it has been found beyond any doubt that smoking
cigarettes is one of the main contributing factors causing heart diseases like
cardiac arrest. Now it is generally accepted that smoking causes lung cancer
and emphysema.

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6.43 STUDENTS BEFORE COLLEGE
Some people believe that students who want to go to college after
graduating from high school should either spend about one year doing a
job to obtain some work experience or travel to enlarge their world
vision. Do you agree or disagree?
INTRODUCTION
Limited experience and vision are common among college students. In this
essay, immaturity, lack of goals, and high costs are mentioned as reasons why
the present situation (status quo) cannot be accepted (tolerated) any longer.
(32 words)
BODY
Students in general are still very immature when they graduate from high
school and have not learned to work on their own (be independent). For
example, they are more interested in playing computer games than studying.
When graduating from high school, many students have no idea what careers
they will want to follow. They are unfamiliar with the different careers that
are available and what certain jobs are about (involve). It means that they
study without goals, and by the time they graduate, they often realize that they
are not qualified (suited) for the jobs that they would then like to do.
The cost of keeping a student at college is high, and we cannot afford to have
students who are immature and have no long-term goals. For instance, when a
student fails an exam or changes his or her major, a lot of money that could
be better used (for more useful purposes) is lost.
Traveling or doing a job (being employed) for a year before going to college
will reduce the above-mentioned problems. Traveling will widen the
students’ vision, and they will learn to be independent, while a job will teach
them some discipline. (186 words)
CONCLUSION

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In short, I have seen that more-mature students with clear goals will save
countries a lot of money and resources. I therefore conclude that students
should travel or work for at least a year before enrolling at a college. (39
words) (Total words: 257)