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The line graph provides information about UK imported road, water, rail and pipeline between a span of 28 year period from 1972 to 2000. Paraphrase the statement with your own words by changing the structure. The amount of goods transported by four different modes of transport namely road, water, rail and pipeline in the UK over a 28-year period from 1972 to 2000 is shown in the line graph. The quantity is expressed in million tonnes.
Overall, road transportation in UK had a dominance during the period while the demand for pipeline made up the least amount in this country. Units are measured tonnes. (This is for the introduction. Look at this one to learn something new: Overall, road remained the primary way of transport during the 28-year period. In addition, shipments increased for all the modes except rail, which was essentially unchanged.
From 1972 to 1988, the amount of transportation of by pipeline and water increased from nearly zero and about 40 million tonnes to 25 and 60 million tonnes respectively. Furthermore, the demand for The shipments via water in UK fall until 1996 , but it started again raise to just over 60 million tonnes. In terms of rail importing transportation by rail, the pattern decreased steadily between 1972 and 1984 , before fluctuating next 12 year period. And the quantity of transporting rail grow up steadily from 1996 to beginning of the century.
Moreover, UK’s the most transporting modes of transport was road in 1972 with approximately 70 million tonnes . However , this figure oscillated over the period and made up almost 100 million tonnes in 2000. Between 1988 and 1992 the figure for pipeline experienced small increase (around 26 million tonnes) and remained constant till 2000. You are confusing the reader and becoming out of topic: decline and fluctuation on pipeline decline and fluctuation on the amount of goods shipped by pipeline)
Separate your bodies from each other according to a logically true base. Your job is NOT to list the numbers. You MUST give comparisons where relevant. This means you should think about which are the highest and lowest. Which figures are similar? Which figures are very different? Can you group the data in some way?
How to Write the Overview Note that in my overview paragraph, not only did I describe the overall trends (the green), I also compared which way of transport had the biggest figures (the red).
Overall, road remained the primary way of transport during the 28-year period. In addition, shipments increased for all the modes except rail, which was essentially unchanged.
Modes of Transport
Means of transport
Ways of transport
Methods of transport
Example About 40 million tonnes of freight were transported by rail.
Example The volume of cargo shipped by water showed an overall increase.
Example Rail freight shipments were essentially unchanged.
Task 2
Organizing Hosting to international sport events such as The Football World Cub and The Olympic Games is often interested by many countries. Most people consider that it is beneficial for these countries’ economy while other people regard that this events arise many issues to citizens.
On the one hand, it is true that many countries try to hold sport events in order to enhance their financial position. The prior advantages of this if these popular events occur one country , most tourists and well known people may visit there who and spend most of their finance in that country .By this way local business is developed and citizens make more money. Not bad but you have only 1 main point here and you have tried to explain it in detail! It is recommended that main ideas should be at least 2. You should add the second one to the body with the help of in addition/moreover/secondly/another disadvantage is that…
On the other hand, holding these events have has some drawbacks. One of them is that it is damaging for citizens because once more tourists visits the price of everything such as food and hotels increase dramatically and local people will be unable to buy thing . That is way it cause local people’s disgust, so they disagree. (You had good ideas but you did not manage to develop and support them properly. It is not possible to link sentences to each other without the help of linking words, such as but, however, as, because, while, although… you did many times so in this essay )
To sum up, I think there are a number of benefits of organizing sport events like financial support and drawbacks like increasing prices .
Overall, this is not a good one because of many grammar and logic errors. You should work on the following things:
Correct your grammar
Make sure whether the words you are using are academic and suitable for the context or not
Develop your main points with supporting ideas and use linking words to make you essay well-connected and natural
Give clear ideas and develop them. If you do not explain your ideas well it may be impossible to get 7+ band score in academic writing! Because the quality is always more important than the quantity here.
Do not panic! This is not a bad one but you should write at least 250 words otherwise, it is impossible to get even 6+ although you have excellent grammar and good vocab! Watch again lesson1 to learn how to write 250 words.
Introduction --- 30-40
Body1 ----------90-100
Body2 ----------90-100
Conclusion ----30-40
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