What’s Next? Identifying Targets for this Student:
•
AF 1 – The author needs to focus on linking his/her evidence to the reasons provided.
•
AF 7 – The author could also improve his/her piece by including more convincing language (e.g., “In my
opinion,” “Truly,” “Without a doubt,” etc.).
Comments:
The author understands the objective of a persuasive letter and identifies three main reasons for daily physical
education. The author needs to focus on developing supporting evidence for each presented reason. The
elaborated evidence needs to be more relevant and directly relatable to the presented arguments. The student
demonstrates considerable strength in writing a well-developed and structured opening and closing, although
he/she can strive to hook the reader’s attention more effectively and creatively in the opening and include an
action statement in the closing. Finally, the author should focus on his/her use of punctuation, particularly the
use of question marks, commas in lists, and using commas to mark clauses.
35
Do'stlaringiz bilan baham: |