Writing task 1

Writing task 1

The two pie chart gives information about the percentage of things in two country and the rest of the world which was usage of water.

Your intro is not good enough because you have got terrible mistakes. When you are writing one, try to write it in a clear and simple way, making it mistake free. Look at mine.

The pie charts give information about how much water is used for three purposes in two American regions and across the globe.

It is clear that while the index of San Diego and California's figures are by far highest in the residential area than the rest of the world. But the agriculture of worldwide is much bigger than the others.

OMG. How can you write such a horrible overview, because you just ignored the sentence structures and made GREAT grammar mistakes. . However still you have some mistakes in your word usage. For example you shouldn’t use the words like “index, figures” in your overview if the context requires. Unfortunately, they are still unnecessary here. Your overview in an adjusted form

It is clear that while the index of San Diego and California’s figures are by far the highest for residential purposes, agriculture is much bigger than the others across the globe.

In details, residential of the San Diego stood at 60 percent. However, worldwide was slightly more than San Diego. Agriculture of the two places were much more different each others.The water usage of the San Diego used 17 percent and that was 4 as much as the worldwide. Similarly, San Diego county and worldwide used same amount for industry which was with 23 percent.

As for,the percentage of California made up nearly a fourty,which was residential area.California used slightly more from agriculture than San Diego and it organized 28 persent water of the California used 33 percent for industry.

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