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Furthermore, individuals from a variety of cultural backgrounds
benefit society in many other ways. Because of their multi-cultural
nature, countries like Australia, the UK, and Canada run a variety of
yearly events to celebrate the coming together of different cultures.
These festivals serve as tourist attractions that boost the local economy,
providing jobs and prosperity. These celebrations have the added effect
of solidifying the area’s identity and uniting people in celebration, which
arguably contributes to a healthier, happier society.
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First, we are going to signal to the reader that we will be talking
about a disadvantage here. So, language like “one potential stumbling
block, is…” is very useful. As soon as we’ve done this, we will state
exactly what that disadvantage is, so we’re not wasting too many words.
 
One potential stumbling block is if the situation is not managed
correctly and new communities do not become integrated.
 
Now that we’ve stated our disadvantage, we will expand and explain a
bit:
This can lead to a feeling of isolation which often causes conflict and
resentment if not managed properly.
We will now give what could be considered as an example, even
though we are keeping it very general in this case. We will finish the
example by explaining the disadvantage in a little more detail, by being
more specific.
Furthermore, if communities become entrenched in specific areas
within a city, and there are insufficient resources to serve all
communities equally, this can result in further conflict, as a feeling of
injustice becomes widespread.
The full body paragraph would be:
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