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A variety of advantages are created by living and working in a
diverse society. For starters, multi-cultural environments allow people to
broaden their understanding of the world and of human nature.
Different cultures produce different perspectives and ideas, which help
people learn more about the world. Having people from different parts of
the world living together in the same region can provide excellent
learning opportunities, as people are exposed to a variety of languages,
cultures, and traditions. People can experience different foods, and
different customs every day, leading to more tolerance and improved
relations among communities.
 
 
Body Paragraph 2
 
1- State One Advantage
2- Expand/Explain
3- Example
 
We are going to signal to the reader that we will state another
advantage in this paragraph:
 
Furthermore, individuals from a variety of cultural backgrounds benefit
society in many other ways.
 
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We will use an example to expand and explain this advantage: 
 
Because of their multi-cultural nature, countries like Australia, the UK,
and Canada run a variety of yearly events to celebrate the coming
together of different cultures.
 
We now expand on and explain the advantage:
 
These festivals serve as tourist attractions that boost the local economy,
providing jobs and prosperity. These celebrations have the added effect
of solidifying the area’s identity and uniting people in celebration,
which arguably contributes to a healthier, happier society.
As you can see, it doesn’t matter which order you choose with the
example and explanation. You can use your example to expand and
explain, or you can expand and explain and then include an example to
support your claims.
So the whole paragraph would look like this