Ielts sample essays collection

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(TA) Task Achievement
Addresses all parts of the task. Presents a clear position throughout the response
and presents, extends and supports main ideas, There may be a tendency to 
overgeneralise and supporting ideas may lack focus.
(CC) Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organises information and ideas. There is clear progression throughout.
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Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under 
use. Presents a clear central topic to each paragraph.
(LR) Lexical Resource
 
Uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision. Uses 
less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation. May 
produce some errors in word choice, spelling and word formation.
(GRA) Grammatical Range and Accuracy
 
Uses a variety of complex structures. Produces frequent error-free sentences. Has 
good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors. 
 
Example 3
It is suggested that domestic works should be highly valued in museums and 
galleries. I agree with the importance of local exhibits and it is also necessary to 
exhibit international collections. 
Enhancing the sense of cultural identity is one of the primary reasons for having 
museums and art galleries in a country. If museums constantly upgrade local antiques 
and have a fascinating collection ranging from Iron age pottery to old jewellery, locals 
are more likely to visit these historical attractions in their spare time as these old 
collections have provided them with opportunities to deepen their understanding 
about traditions. For example, when observing a precious dragon jade created in 
ancient China, Chinese visitors may be proud of the delicate and traditional craft.
Meanwhile, national galleries have exhibited local artworks created by domestic 
artists, like a painting demonstrating a Rome style building. This exhibit is also able to 
inspire Italians to realize how spectacular their civilization is. 
On the other hand, introducing foreign artworks can boost local tourism. Local people 
are normally interested in visiting museums and galleries where 
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have various 
exotic works. For instance, when introducing artefacts, including sculptures, dresses 
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Comment [A21]: 
Wonderful sentence.

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