Ielts essay samples band 9

"Adult youths are often called up for working for the development of communities. 
Do you think they should work voluntarily or should they get paid? Give your opinion 
in no less than 250 words." 
 
Model Answer: 
The development of communities requires the vibrant energy of young blood. There are 
many volunteer programs, in most communities, where the young utilize their vigour 
for the good of men. But, to ascertain the involvement of the young adult in community 
development, I believe monetary incentives should be there. 
It is true that one should not wait for material advantages before trying to contribute to 
his society. The drive for helping others should be an integral part of one’s moral 
integrity. But too often the modern man is compelled to shun that which is moral and 
embrace what is beneficial materially, directly, and to himself. Aside from the weakness 
of character shown in such cases, by man, often his morality succumbs to the rising need 
for sustaining oneself independently. Ages ago the youth was spared from such 
desperation, by the cooperative social structure of then. But now, every adult is out on 
his own. So, to neutralize the economic pressure blocking the adult young from 
participating in community development, the people should arrange for them monetary 
incentives. That way they can sustain themselves and the community at the same time. 
A more practical perspective may tell us that today’s age is really not so much 
compatible with volunteering. In many developed countries, even the police force is run 
profitably. And CSR of profit motivated enterprises has started replacing non-profit 
philanthropy. So to expect adults, young or not, to volunteer for community 
development is only cacophony amidst the modern melody of social building and 
maintenance.
In the end, though, a conclusion to this argument relies on circumstantial judgement, 
and balancing of individual and social interests. While money will motivate a permanent 
source of energy for developing communities, youths should not wait for a cost benefit 
analysis before saving a community in dire straits.

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7.You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. 
Present a written argument to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the 
following topic: