Ielts essay samples band 9

"Nowadays it is noticed that cultural mixing is reflected within local cultural practices. 
Do you think it is good for our society?" 
Model Answer: 
In this era of globalization, boundaries – political, geographical, cultural – are being 
removed as peoples blend and persons share, with each other, the very values that once 
segregated them. Cultural mixing has begun tearing down all the ethnical and racial 
pigeonholes and move us closer, by the day, towards one universal race of humans. Like 
all else, even this has its occasional downsides, which, when put in comparison with the 
upsides, are negligible. 
Firstly, we have to consider that cultural mixing is perhaps the only non-coercive way 
to move global humanity towards ideal equality, a belief sought for by all the great 
persons, and political and religious ideologies. While many have struggled throughout 
human history to uproot tyranny, oppression, bigotry and segregation, their paths have 
been tainted by the blood of the bold and tears of the beautiful. True that we, through 
our ravaging revolutions, have progressed, but at a cost that undoubtedly has been dear. 
Cultural mixing, on the other hand, is the benedictory prophet, who ushers the great 
communion of all men in empathy, leaving behind all ethos, and he comes only in peace. 
Yet, some conservatives argue that free-mixing of cultural values degrade people’s 
sense of morality. They must be conveniently forgetful of all the immoralities, in the 
name of conservation, that evidently have tarnished human history. Although, it is 
undeniable that cultural mixing, like any other progressive enterprise, has coincided with 
social unpleasantries, for example declining stability among families in the third world 
countries, the blame has not yet been rationally put. And, of course, there are many other 
socio-economic controllers such as wage-earning, and individualism that may very well 
be responsible for today’s social ills. 
In sum, we must not be closed-minded to the global brethren cultures, because, only by 
doing this we may, one day, realize the ever-cherished dreamland of universal humanity, 
where “… all the people, sharing the world in peace” will not be only a thing of 
imagination. 

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18.You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. You should write at least 250 words. 
Present a written argument to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the 
following topic: