Ielts-7-Writing

6.48 RETIREMENT
Companies should encourage their senior staff to retire at age fifty-five
in order to give more opportunities to the younger generation. Do you
agree or disagree?
INTRODUCTION
After spending most of your adult life working, the decision to retire is not an
easy one. Relevant factors like corporate movement, technology
development, and dreams will be looked at in this essay. (33 words)
BODY
To start, we should think of (consider) the fact that every year more and more
students are graduating and looking for jobs (entering the labor market).
When people retire at the age of sixty or sixty-five they are blocking
(restricting) youngsters from entering the market. That is to say, everyone
working for that person (junior) has to wait so much longer before they are
able to move up the corporate ladder.
Second, we have to remember that technology is changing at an ever-
increasing pace. If a person has not been studying actively during his working
life, his or her knowledge will be completely outdated at age fifty-five. For
instance, the time to develop a new type (generation) of computers is reduced
all the time. The members of the younger generation in an organization or
company are usually familiar with these developments.
Lastly, at the age of fifty-five, employees have had enough (sufficient)
opportunity to realize their dreams or fulfill their ambitions and should be
content with what they have achieved. For instance, one should really not
start chasing (pursuing) a new dream at this age or have many unfulfilled
ambitions. (180 words)
CONCLUSION

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I have discussed the question by mentioning (referring to) movement in the
corporate structure, new technology, and dreams and ambitions. From this, it
can be concluded that it would be very good (advantageous) if people were
to retire at age fifty-five. (38 words) (Total words: 251)

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