information, ideas, and events
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The piece has a short opening that states where the author went (e.g., “In the beginning, I went to the beach”);
however, the phrase “In the beginning” does not provide the reader with information regarding the time of the
event.
A phrase like “On Saturday” would be more appropriate for recount writing.
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The details of the event are ordered logically and appropriately, but seem choppy due to the lack of elaboration
and detail.
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There is no evidence of a closing in the text, such as a personal feeling statement (e.g., “I had fun at the beach”)
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